here you go gollum

[dwim]

Kiss Ghazal

I never wanted to have a dream like this,
so never will I, once again, feel your kiss.

The desire to run to you was always strong.
I'd avoid the bullets just to feel your kiss.

Now, it's all lost, it's gone, this merciless world
took your lips so I am robbed of your sweet kiss.

These memories, like a record in my mind,
recalls every good moment that we would kiss.

The gray sky, full of tears like these eyes crying
life will be bare, desolate, without your sweet kiss.

I never wanted to go and you had to
So never again tomorrow, will I kiss.

I recall them waltzes, them foxtrots and jazz
out on the dancefloor you were the queen I kiss

Sad, mournful am I, when they lowered yur body
undertaker shoveled in the dirts - no more kiss.

is it good?

[Oz]

well, im not g, and i dont REALLY grasp the form, but it seems pretty good to me.

[gollum]

right on i dig it. some really nice moments in this.

(and Oz, you don't have to stay strict to the form, which makes things a little easier)

-g

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Pray for the dead, but fight like hell for the living.
-Mother Jones-